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明明時間還有 很多就這樣浪費掉了
Argument84 第11篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：32分28秒 351 words
从2004年2月22日13时55分到2004年2月22日14时32分
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The following appeared in a memo written by the head of the Gorham School.
'Our school cafeteria should make changes in the lunches that it serves in order to improve the health of our students. Several teachers and I have observed that students who eat these meals tend to eat the main course and the dessert, but seldom finish the vegetable portion. This pattern means that students are missing the vital nutritional benefits of fruits and vegetables, which are typically rich in vitamins and minerals. Therefore, the school cafeteria should serve larger fruit and vegetable portions along with smaller main course and dessert portions. This change will be effective because, according to research conducted at the Rose Children's Hospital, children eat the same amount of food served to them—about 55 percent, on average—no matter what the main course is.'
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In this argument, the author asserted that Gorham school cafeteria should make changes in the lunches to improve the health of its students. To justify this conclustion, several evidences were used to support the author's point of view: serveral teachers and the author observed that students who eats more main courses than vegetables would miss vital nutrients; according to a report, children eat about 55 percent of food severd to them. It seems plausible, however, there are several fallacies after my analysis.
In the first place, serveral teacher and the author discovered a situation which students tended to eat more main courses and desserts than vegetables. Nevertheless, it isn't resonable to demonstrate the reliability of their observation. Maybe the number of teachers was too small to represent whole teachers' opinion and commonsense. Besides, the number of students observed was not given and it is easy for teachers to describe a stiuation with too much subjectiveness. In other words, the number of students was negelected by the author and it is a sigificant data to prove the correctness of this argument.
Another fallacy exsited in the relasionship which eating less vegetables means missing vital nutrients, such as vitamins and minerals. It is generally acknowledged that vegetables contains plenty of vitamins and minerals, however, the situation which students ate less vegetables can not be used to infer that students are missing these important elements or lack of them. Students observed by teachers were possibly eating other healthy food full of vitamins and minerals in their daily life, and as a result, they did not need to eat too much vegetables. In addition, vegetables produced by cafteria may be distasteful and disgusted by students. That is to say, increasing vegetables will not improve students' eating habits.
Moreover, according to Children's Hospital's report, children eat the same amount of food served to them -- about 55 percent, on average -- no matter what the main course is. This report seems persuasive, however, lack of a momentous data make it unconvincible -- age. Different students with different ages have different interested in different main courses and anything else. Maybe in other ages, the percentage of students eating food are higher or lower than the statistics mentioned above.
To sum up, to let this argument more credible, the author must complement several fallacies stated above, and give more datas to bolster this atgument
明明時間還有 很多就這樣浪費掉了
Argument84 第11篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：32分28秒 351 words
从2004年2月22日13时55分到2004年2月22日14时32分
------题目------
The following appeared in a memo written by the head of the Gorham School.
'Our school cafeteria should make changes in the lunches that it serves in order to improve the health of our students. Several teachers and I have observed that students who eat these meals tend to eat the main course and the dessert, but seldom finish the vegetable portion. This pattern means that students are missing the vital nutritional benefits of fruits and vegetables, which are typically rich in vitamins and minerals. Therefore, the school cafeteria should serve larger fruit and vegetable portions along with smaller main course and dessert portions. This change will be effective because, according to research conducted at the Rose Children's Hospital, children eat the same amount of food served to them—about 55 percent, on average—no matter what the main course is.'
------正文------
In this argument, the author asserted that Gorham school cafeteria should make changes in the lunches to improve the health of its students. To justify this conclustion, several evidences were used to support the author's point of view: serveral teachers and the author observed that students who eats more main courses than vegetables would miss vital nutrients; according to a report, children eat about 55 percent of food severd to them. It seems plausible, however, there are several fallacies after my analysis.
In the first place, serveral teacher and the author discovered a situation which students tended to eat more main courses and desserts than vegetables. Nevertheless, it isn't resonable to demonstrate the reliability of their observation. Maybe the number of teachers was too small to represent whole teachers' opinion and commonsense. Besides, the number of students observed was not given and it is easy for teachers to describe a stiuation with too much subjectiveness. In other words, the number of students was negelected by the author and it is a sigificant data to prove the correctness of this argument.
Another fallacy exsited in the relasionship which eating less vegetables means missing vital nutrients, such as vitamins and minerals. It is generally acknowledged that vegetables contains plenty of vitamins and minerals, however, the situation which students ate less vegetables can not be used to infer that students are missing these important elements or lack of them. Students observed by teachers were possibly eating other healthy food full of vitamins and minerals in their daily life, and as a result, they did not need to eat too much vegetables. In addition, vegetables produced by cafteria may be distasteful and disgusted by students. That is to say, increasing vegetables will not improve students' eating habits.
Moreover, according to Children's Hospital's report, children eat the same amount of food served to them -- about 55 percent, on average -- no matter what the main course is. This report seems persuasive, however, lack of a momentous data make it unconvincible -- age. Different students with different ages have different interested in different main courses and anything else. Maybe in other ages, the percentage of students eating food are higher or lower than the statistics mentioned above.
To sum up, to let this argument more credible, the author must complement several fallacies stated above, and give more datas to bolster this atgument
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